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2011年04月12日17:05

  The importance of volunteer work

  崔静远

  辽宁省鞍山市鞍山市第一中学高三18班

  In my opinion, volunteer work is quite an important part of the modern society. The reasons are as follows.

  In the modern time, thanks to the deselopment of economy and technolodge, material enjoyment 13 earned both in higher quality and larger quantiy. At a price of this, individunls are taking the risk of losing their own values and even sparing no effert to make their fartane even at the price of the interest of the society. So the volunteer work has been playing an important part as a spiritual comfort not only to the receivers but also to the volunteers, promoting the well-being of the love-givers, making ertra value for others and keeping a perfect balance of the whole society.

  In families, volunteer work will help to emphasize the importance of morality, meet emotional needs and even become a vivid educational lesson. Parents, who are widely regarded as the first and most important teachers of their children, are teaching their children through the activities which must truely toach the deepest part of the young souls, instead of serious, traditional crivical words. Also, during the process, in which every member showstus true love, other members are able to recognize him from a difference point of view. This kind of awarness is promised to promote the communication of the family in the future. In the whole world, the volunteer work can be considered to be an appropriate part of the globalization, during which the world is becoming a Global village. And the natural and economic chisasters are driving people from different cultaral back grounds to stand together on the same side, emphasizing the interest of the whole world, which must not be deffended without any country's participation. And it is the volunteer work that can be granted the role of offering help in its hour of marimum need.

  All in all, volunteer work is truely an inreplacable part of the society and it is our responsibility to give our hands to make the world a better place.

  专家建议:

  建议该生平时利用好学校里使用的中学英语教科书,因为教科书的权威性不容置疑,选材也适合中学生,是精读甚至背诵的最好选择。之所以推荐给作者教科书,是因为该考生在写作长句子时出现较多错误,说明该生的语法基础不够夯实,那么中学英语课本就恰好能弥补这个弱点。

  专家点评:

  文章结构清晰明了,简洁明了的开头和结尾紧扣主题,精干又有力,很方便读者对文章主旨的把握。中间部分的逻辑性强,思路也很清晰。唯一不足的是在一些长难句的表达上出现了一些错误,有些句子让人很难理解。在以后的写作中可以多关注长句子的练习。

  

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